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Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 3

szaleniec1000 Jul 02, 2014 21:32

Last time, our intrepid nudists boarded the nudist cruise. Which seems to have everyone they met at Cap d'Agde last year, including someone they actually didn't meet but the author wants us to think they did. The only way this would make any sense is if Cap d'Agde was closed and had directed all its regulars to the same cruise.

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 3 )

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Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 1 part 1

szaleniec1000 Oct 29, 2011 14:24

The Hogwarts Exposed series consists of four fics (well, three and a half) which follow the same one story per year format as Harry Potter itself. This was quite a popular format for longfic in the three-year summer: the Draco Trilogy and Psychic Serpent also did it, for instance. Too Exposed begins where Exposed left off. "Left off" being the key ( Read more... )

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Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 16 part 3

szaleniec1000 Jun 22, 2011 01:48

Yes, you will go to the ball. More's the pity.

( The chapter concludes... )

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Deserving Chapter 48

szaleniec1000 Jan 30, 2011 00:00

Ladies and gentlemen, this is it. If you've been following the sporking so far, Chapter 48 needs no introduction. It's not even "just" the revelation about the Dursleys did to Harry, but Chapter 48 is just all of the worst of Deserving distilled into a single chapter. Think about that for a moment.

( Deserving Chapter 48 (NSFW, of course) )

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Deserving Chapter 32

szaleniec1000 Dec 04, 2010 17:55

I noticed the summary (and body, from what little I've read) of one of her older stories left "wizarding world" uncapitalised, as it should be. I don't know where or why she picked up that lousy habit later on, but it rears its ugly head in this chapter too.
( Deserving Chapter 32 )

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Deserving Chapter 27

szaleniec1000 Nov 09, 2010 23:40

Severus Snape has more in common with crabs than with you or me. Now that is scientific fact. There's no real evidence, but it is scientific fact.
( Deserving Chapter 27 )

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Deserving Chapter 15

szaleniec1000 Oct 02, 2010 17:29

Just for a lark I tried reading one of the author's other fics. I got as far as the "sexually binding curse" that had been put on Snape by Voldemort and inherited by Harry. Yes, it's what you think it is and yes, it's so contrived it puts Deserving to shame. On which subject...

( Deserving Chapter 15 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Chapter 6

szaleniec1000 Jun 14, 2010 21:47

Dammit, I really can't drink as much as I used to. Now I've recovered from Saturday, here we go:
( Deserving Chapter 6 )

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